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- I am sorry - by ~-master-:icon-master-:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Old Poetry Structure > Emotional




I am truly and gratefully sorry
I don’t want you to live in this sorrow

I want to be good
I want to be great

Send me inside
Your mind

So I can see your insides
So I can leave my incise

I want to know what you’re thinking tonight
I don’t want to be alone once again tonight

I want to be the one who you always wanted
I want to be your prince charming you always wanted

I want to be everything,
                                   I want to be everything but your mistake
                                   I want to be your mystique
                                   I don’t want to be mistook

I want to know how you see us
I want to gain your trust

I can’t get over my madness over you
I only need to take the time to understand you

You are my queen
I want to be seen
By you

I want to be everything but your mistake…
©2003-2009 ~-master-
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Author's Comments

Just something I wrote a few days ago...
Oh thanks to psychodemon for finding a mistake :) All fixed. Hope the moon is better now ralasterphecy :).

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~frtherisforver Sep 30, 2003, 11:05:58 PM
Very nice pic to adjoin with your words. I'm faving this right now..:).

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~ralasterphecy Sep 30, 2003, 11:19:57 PM
I like this a lot my friend! The structure, the font, the picture...except for the moon looks strange, but overall this is amazing. The concept of having a poem, such as this on this kind of picture is truely brillant. It magnifies, with the scope of the picture, what the poem is saying. In the poetry itself I appreciate how you concentrate on being something good for the other person, which is very noble. It is said "the only thing we can change and improve upon with any certainty, is ourselves." I think when we want to be better people, and make life enjoyable for others, then we are on the right track. Nice work my friend!

:+fav:

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~psychodemon Oct 1, 2003, 6:51:05 AM
This s actually great. You made one mistake..there is spose to be a to in I want know how you see us. But this is very good. I like "I want to be everything but your mistake." I've felt this way....and you expressed it clearly. I like this a lot.

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How ever far away...I will always love you.
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~-master- Oct 1, 2003, 8:45:02 AM
Oops your right lol... I should fix that :).

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I can only reflect as far as I can see and my vision is very blurry and I can not see.
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~-master- Oct 1, 2003, 8:45:30 AM
Thanks! Glad you enjoyed it :).

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I can only reflect as far as I can see and my vision is very blurry and I can not see.
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~-master- Oct 1, 2003, 8:46:40 AM
Maybe I should make the moon bigger perhaps... Thanks :).

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I can only reflect as far as I can see and my vision is very blurry and I can not see.
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~ralasterphecy Oct 1, 2003, 9:51:45 AM
:) Looks better XD

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~-master- Oct 1, 2003, 9:54:23 AM
Thanks :).

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I can only reflect as far as I can see and my vision is very blurry and I can not see.
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~danceman Oct 1, 2003, 11:34:46 AM
what we can see but cannot have... in my case its that i do not dare to... :P

the structure is really cool my friend, more than cool infact.
the poem as a whole is wonderful :nod:

takes a dive into my favs, excellent emotion... i can relate... atleast to what i see in it :)

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Clatto Verata N... Necktie... Neckturn... Nickel... It's an "N" word, it's definitely an "N" word! Clatto... Verata... N--- *cough* Okay... that's it!
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